Matt Bellamy

I wouldn't have known that if you hadn't said so. It's nice to have a hidden meaning but maybe you could give the reader a few more hints to help ...

Erm...dare I say greeting card style? Like Chevy said, cliche. Nice rhyming though, very natural I thought. But why the red? It takes the reader's attention away from the poem ...

Love the powerful deeper meaning. Like Bobo said, optimistic and pessimistic at the same time. Slightly morbid but very uplifting. Great job, Hunter.

I farted in an exam once :? My friend sat behind me could smell it apparently, goodness knows who else could...

Thanks for your comments. I guess it was meant to be simple...but don't worry, I'm not :P

If she's telling the story out loud then that's fine but it's not something you normally see if something's just been written down. Anytime you need a critique, honey :)

Good description you added there DM, you seem to have a knack for it. Places that seemed a bit conversation-ish: Okay now that I look I can't find many examples, ...

As usual, I want to say something vaguely constructive, but can't. Loved it, as always.

"You made me remember what my knees are for." and "All I want from you is to promise me that you will never die to live again." were great...this is ...

Don't worry Little Soldier, it's fine. Thanks for your comments, everyone :)

*Nods* Nice :)

Uhhhhhhh What Emma said. I didn't get it. Still liked it though, and a 13+ thingy should be put up, no? I liked "It’s so hard to eat now, to ...

I liked the feel of this: I am a Living Breathing Shell of a person. It just sounded good to me structured that way. Not bad, overall. Keep writing.

I liked this a lot-liked the style, the description, and particularly the ending. real suggestions, it's just very good. Keep writing.

I think you kind of lost the flow in the last two or three stanzas, and "She knows who it was in the back of her mind/But does she really ...